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Re: Writers' Club

Post by HollyShort9 » Tue 30th Dec 2008

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Post by Captain Short 711 » Fri 2nd Jan 2009

I'm writing a book about a young Vampire called ivy and im hoping to publish it like livvy when im older but i need to make sure its long enough first...
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Re: Writers' Club

Post by MMK » Fri 2nd Jan 2009

The Volturi had called it something fancy, she didn't remember the exact name. I don't remember what that name was, or even remember if they said one. But I think that this is a little clumsy. Either you know the name or you don't.


Just want to say that I remember reading that they had a name for it, but I don't remember what it was. It was Italian or something.

And I like the *Bella-is-dead dance* IH.
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Re: Writers' Club

Post by Target Aquired » Sat 3rd Jan 2009

I'm going through a writer's block with Fermata. I have all the events planned out in my head, but I can't write anything on paper. My Kingdom Hearts muse, however, seems to be thriving.

Anyone have any amazing fanfictions they've read or inspiring songs?? I feel terrible for my readers (those who are still following, that is...)

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Post by Captain Short 711 » Sat 3rd Jan 2009

MMK wrote:The Volturi had called it something fancy, she didn't remember the exact name. I don't remember what that name was, or even remember if they said one. But I think that this is a little clumsy. Either you know the name or you don't.


What edward was to bella? was it in latin?

La Tua Cantante - "his singer" in latin. they call bella Edwards "singer" because her blood sings to him.

MMK wrote:And I like the *Bella-is-dead dance* IH.


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Re: Writers' Club

Post by HollyShort9 » Sat 3rd Jan 2009

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MMK wrote:The Volturi had called it something fancy, she didn't remember the exact name. I don't remember what that name was, or even remember if they said one. But I think that this is a little clumsy. Either you know the name or you don't.


What edward was to bella? was it in latin?

La Tua Cantante - "his singer" in latin. they call bella Edwards "singer" because her blood sings to him.

MMK wrote:And I like the *Bella-is-dead dance* IH.


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Yes, that's correct- they called her his "la tua cantante", his singer.
And CS711, cool it. Remember what we talked about? Stop with the evil smilies. Some people like Twilight, some don't. You just have to get over the fact that some people don't.
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Re: Writers' Club

Post by BlackOpal » Sun 4th Jan 2009

Thanks to darvit and /b/for my signature. :D
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Post by Target Aquired » Sun 4th Jan 2009

Cripes, Opal! You just wrote the most amazing thing ever and you don't even TELL the writing thread?!

Psh. :P

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4768171/1/T ... ay_Concern

Go read it. Right now. I'm doing some shameless advertising here, I know.

BlackOpal-- Left a huge review for you. :P

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Post by BlackOpal » Sun 4th Jan 2009

I know, the review made my life. :)
Thanks, I didn't think that it was /that/ good. XD
I thought that the Suefic was more amusing. :D
It was an awesome review, thanks, haha.
Thanks to darvit and /b/for my signature. :D
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Re: Writers' Club

Post by Meova » Mon 5th Jan 2009

Anyone have any amazing fanfictions they've read or inspiring songs?? I feel terrible for my readers (those who are still following, that is...)


Er, I've been getting lots of inspiration from Hit The Floor, by Bullet for my Valentine, but I don't know if it helps you, since I've never read Fermata, sorry...

And CS711 and HS9 - I knew it was La Tua Cantante, but I figured Bella wouldn't remember the name, since she was too busy running away from Edward.
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Post by xox Miss Livia xox » Wed 7th Jan 2009

"People are gonna tell you who you are your whole life. You just gotta punch back and say, "No, this is who I am". You want people to look at you differently? Make them! You want to change things, you're gonna have to go out there and change them yourself, because there are no fairy godmothers in this world." - Emma Swan, Once Upon A Time.
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Re: Writers' Club

Post by HollyShort9 » Fri 6th Feb 2009

Okay, I was listening to Don't Impress Me Much by Shania Twain, and I GOT INSPIRATION!
It's an anti Trouble/Holly pro Artemis/Holly, if you can't tell.
The person that 'don't impress her much' is Trouble, if you can't tell.
Someone beta it pl0x?
Here it is;


#I've known a few guys who thought they were pretty smart
But you've got being right down to an art
You think you're a genius-you drive me up the wall
You're a regular original, a know-it-all
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else#

“So Holly, want to… um… go out?” Trouble asked.
“What?!” Holly almost shrieked it.
“Well… I thought… um… nevermind.” Trouble turned around to walk away.
“Look, Trouble,” Holly sighed.


#Okay, so you're a rocket scientist
That don't impress me much
So you got the brain but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
That don't impress me much#

“I like you as a friend.”
The words shocked through Trouble. “But..” he stammered.
“Trouble, I like you. But I don’t… think we should be a couple.”
She turned, and walked away.
Any chance of a romance slipped through Trouble’s fingers…

#I never knew a guy who carried a mirror in his pocket
And a comb up his sleeve-just in case
And all that extra hold gel in your hair oughtta lock it
'Cause Heaven forbid it should fall outta place

Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else#

Holly’s fairy communicator vibrated.
Artemis.

#Okay, so you're Brad Pitt
That don't impress me much
So you got the looks but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
That don't impress me much

You're one of those guys who likes to shine his machine
You make me take off my shoes before you let me get in
I can't believe you kiss your car good night
C'mon baby tell me-you must be jokin', right!#

Holly picked it up.
“Hi, Artemis.”
“Hello, Holly.”

#Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else

Okay, so you've got a car
That don't impress me much
So you got the moves but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night#

“Trouble asked me out,” she said. “He kept stammering. I felt so bad about it, but I turned him down. I don’t think… that he should be a couple… with me.”

#That don't impress me much
You think you're cool but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm on the long, cold, lonely night
That don't impress me much

Okay, so what do you think you're Elvis or something...
Oo-Oh-Oh
That don't impress me much!#

“Oh, I’m sorry to hear that,” Artemis replied. “But I was wondering… would you like to go out… with me?”
Holly sat there for a few seconds, stunned.
“Holly, are you there?”
She snapped out of it.
“Oh… um… yes, I’m here,” she stammered. “Sure, I’d love to.”
“Great.” She could feel the smile in Artemis’s face.

#Oh-Oh-Oh-Oh-No
Alright! Alright!

You're Tarzan!
Captain Kirk maybe.
John Wayne.
Whatever!
That don't impress me much!#
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Post by Meova » Sat 7th Feb 2009

Beta'ing... Though I'm not such a good one, I'll try for you ;)

#I've known a few guys who thought they were pretty smart
But you've got being right down to an art
You think you're a genius-you drive me up the wall
You're a regular original, a know-it-all
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else#

“So Holly, want to… um… go out?” Trouble asked. I'd put some more description here. How did he ask it? Where were they? Etc.
“What?!” Holly almost shrieked it. Don't think the 'it' is necessary...
“Well… I thought… um… nevermind.” Trouble turned around to walk away.
“Look, Trouble,” Holly sighed. Why is she sighing? Is she annoyed? Did she just not know how to react? Details help much ;)


#Okay, so you're a rocket scientist
That don't impress me much
So you got the brain but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
That don't impress me much#

“I like you as a friend.”
The words shocked through Trouble. “But..” he stammered.
“Trouble, I like you. But I don’t… think we should be a couple.”
She turned, and walked away.
Any chance of a romance slipped through Trouble’s fingers… This whole thing is a bit too fast for me. I'd make it longer, and add more emotions, details, etc.

#I never knew a guy who carried a mirror in his pocket
And a comb up his sleeve-just in case
And all that extra hold gel in your hair oughtta lock it
'Cause Heaven forbid it should fall outta place

Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else#

Holly’s fairy communicator vibrated.
Artemis.

#Okay, so you're Brad Pitt
That don't impress me much
So you got the looks but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night
That don't impress me much

You're one of those guys who likes to shine his machine
You make me take off my shoes before you let me get in
I can't believe you kiss your car good night
C'mon baby tell me-you must be jokin', right!#

Holly picked it up.
“Hi, Artemis.”
“Hello, Holly.”

#Oh-oo-oh, you think you're special
Oh-oo-oh, you think you're something else

Okay, so you've got a car
That don't impress me much
So you got the moves but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm in the middle of the night#

“Trouble asked me out,” she said. “He kept stammering. I felt so bad about it, but I turned him down. I don’t think… that he should be a couple… with me.”

#That don't impress me much
You think you're cool but have you got the touch
Don't get me wrong, yeah I think you're alright
But that won't keep me warm on the long, cold, lonely night
That don't impress me much

Okay, so what do you think you're Elvis or something...
Oo-Oh-Oh
That don't impress me much!#

“Oh, I’m sorry to hear that,” Artemis replied. “But I was wondering… would you like to go out… with me?”
Holly sat there for a few seconds, stunned.
“Holly, are you there?”
She snapped out of it.
“Oh… um… yes, I’m here,” she stammered. “Sure, I’d love to.”
“Great.” She could feel the smile in Artemis’s face.

#Oh-Oh-Oh-Oh-No
Alright! Alright!

You're Tarzan!
Captain Kirk maybe.
John Wayne.
Whatever!
That don't impress me much!#

Okay, nice thing, but I really really really think it should be expanded much. It's like you wanted to get it over with. Add details, emotions, places, maybe times, some more convo... Dunno if anyone agrees with me, it's just a suggestion, anyway :)
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Re: Writers' Club

Post by HollyShort9 » Sat 7th Feb 2009

Yeah, I knew I was making some mistakes and stuff, and my songfics usually suck. XD

Okay, I'll re-write it when I'm on my computer and not my dad's. XD
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