The first chapter seemed to be mainly crude jokes.
Yeah, I agree about the Fanfiction party.
(Gary Stu, Gary Stu, Gary Stu!

It felt like I was reading a pretty good fanfiction, not the real thing.
I like the magic part.
More time travel= more chances to steal magic?
Or is that out the window, since his body obviously can't adjust?
The illness seems like a bad plot device to me.
It's too... obscure. It's a dangerous disease that she has all of the symptoms to, found only in foreign and barbaric parts of the world! Oh noes!
I dunno...
Involved with a Skier? Is this a soap opera?
But still, I enjoyed a lot of it. I enjoyed Artemis Sr.'s part in it. Parts of it were decent.
I guess that we must trust Colfer.